"After the Storm" was a powerful essay, and after clicking through the interactive website, I walked away with a better understanding as to how the tornado in 2011 truly effected those who lived in Tuscaloosa at the time. I felt true sadness when I clicked through his camera photos and saw the devastation the tornado had created - completely wiping out neighborhoods and the shopping center made it appear as a ghost town. The ongoing message throughout the simulation/essay was to provide a sense of understanding as to what the citizens went through during, and after, the tornado in 2011. The footage was real and raw and really helped to capture the reality of life at that time. The audience that ties to this would be anyone who has visited Tuscaloosa, and anyone who resides currently or used to reside in Tuscaloosa. I found it interesting when the author created a section where I could take houses away and see what Tuscaloosa looked like in certain areas on the simulation before/after the tornado - it really helped to gauge a better grasp on the outcome. Overall, the simulation helped to capture the severity and devastation of the day in April 2011. Without it, faces and places would be harder to picture, and the emotion in his voice and the emphasis he put on certain sentences would not be articulated without it.
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1) Describing my process of working on the essay:
Towards the beginning of my personal narrative, I felt stuck. The topic I chose was on my dog, Mango, and I was determined to have a well thought out message; in order to achieve that, I had to go over my introduction at least 10x to make sure it sounded alright. While writing the story of how Mango came to be ours, I was stumped on how to properly execute it. The description and word flow was very important to me because I wanted to capture the emotion behind the whole experience. 2) Discussing how class related activities affected my writing process: Comments from my peers during the peer review section really helped me to better my descriptive text, and to branch out to better describe the way Mango looked and the emotion behind the situation. From the student conference, I was able to walk away with a better understanding as to how to write a solid introduction and conclusion paragraph. Activities throughout lectures really helped me have a better grasp of being able to relay my message to others and it helped me better understand how to read other personal narratives and put myself in their shoes so to speak. 3) Discussing what I learned about myself as a writer from this experience: Two week ago, I would have told myself to be as descriptive as possible -- the more detail, the better. When it came to me writing my personal narrative, I found that my most unproductive time was spent overthinking what was supposed to come next. My personal narrative was about my sweet dog, Mango, and the ideas should have flowed freely. For the future, I will be sure to include many details that will make the reader feel as if he/she were there when the story took place. 3 Questions I have in regards to my Personal Narrative:
1. Is my topic worth writing about? 2. Am I structuring my paper correctly? 3. Will I have enough content to reach word count? 1. Sight:
6 week old puppy white as snow on Christmas Day. 2. Touch: Skin and bones, cold ears and paws. 3. Smell: Puppy breath. 4. Taste: Fresh ham and mashed potatoes (after all, it was Christmas Day). 5. Sound: Newborn puppy whimpering because she missed her mama and was scared. The Storm in Fragments
The purpose of The Storm in Fragments is to share the perspective of someone who was present during a horrific event (tornadoes) that happened in Tuscaloosa, AL. Throughout this piece, their audience shifts from Gannon Black Sarah Paul Stay at home dad and ditzy friend try to find kidnapped son Killer clown takes his job too seriously Middle aged man in a cat suit terrorizes suburban home I'm reviewing Teresa Nguyen's ePortfolio.
Side note: I had no idea she did mine as well! Ha. As I've said before...
planning is kind of my thing. I always try to have a plan for my plan. When writing my Rhetorical Analysis, I began by creating an outline for each paragraph, even my thesis sentence. This seems to be the best way for me to work efficiently. I found myself stumped a few times over forming my perspective on the piece. Once I had an understanding, words were flowing and my thoughts began to make sense on the screen. Two weeks ago I would have told myself: "You're going to critique every last word you write, so you might want to start this now." And also: "High school AP English can't save you!!!" --> This one mainly because I thought I knew all there is to know about Ethos, Pathos, and Logos.... ha ha ha at me. Generally, I remain very productive when I am doing school work because I have other things I would rather be doing; as does everyone. However, in writing this, I've realized that productivity is a gradual thing, and each time I sit down to write a paper I need to remember that it isn't going to be finished and sparkling. Good things take time, and it's okay to revise multiple times. Feedback from my student conference encouraged me to be vulnerable with my writing, and that I don't have to hide my work due to the fear of it not being perfect. From that interaction, I was able to walk away with useful tools such as de-fluffing, a general understanding to Kairos, and the confidence to properly form an opening paragraph (thesis included). Overall, this assignment was a great introduction to what the rest of the semester will look like, and it makes me excited to know that I will be able to be creative and personable with [most of] my work. 3 questions regarding my first draft to the rhetorical analysis essay:
1) Am I using Kairos properly? Do I have a clear understanding on how to depict the use? 2) Are my thoughts clear and concise? Do I have enough examples to make clear arguments? 3) Am I interpreting the writing the way it was intended to be interpreted? |
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